Thursday, February 11, 2010

Random Story #7


It’s been a while since I posted something, it’s not like I was busy or anything, I just didn’t feel like writing or reading, but as they say better late than never so here I am with a new story. Actually it is an extension an older story called “Hidden Intetions”, but don’t worry you don’t have to read it if you haven’t because this story stands well independently too. In any case if you do wish to read it here is the link. 

DISASTROUS DESIRES
 

He was standing there looking at the picture, completely mesmerized by his own creation. Oh what a face he wondered looking at the portrait, and those eyes , so expressive yet so mysterious, as if telling the whole story but holding back the climax. The art gallery was filled with people, his paintings were a huge hit, most of them had already been sold, it was beyond his expectation, after all this was only his first exhibition. The painting that generated the most buzz was the very painting he was so lost in, the girl in the painting was the woman he loved, this was his special gift for her, no matter how much people were ready to pay for it, he rejected all the offers, it was because of her that this exhibition was held in the first place. She was the one who had encouraged him to pursue his passion or else he would still be doing his boring accounting job. He still couldn’t believe how he could be so lucky to have someone like her in his life, and this portrait was his way to show off to the world what he had and no matter what they did he was never going to let her go.
She was looking at the knife, watching the blood on it’s blade gave her a strange satisfaction, she knew she was not supposed to indulge herself in such a way but she could not help it, she barely escaped the last time, no matter how much she wished she was not going to kill again she had promised herself, she had a killer’s desire but she lacked a killer’s brain, she knew if she ever dared to kill again she would surely be caught, so she had to control herself for her own sake, moreover she was in a fulfilling relationship, he loved her madly and she knew he would never cheat on her like her  ex- husband. She was busy preparing a fancy meal, it was time for celebration, the exhibition was a success and both of them wanted to celebrate it alone, in a rush to finish the preparation she had cut her finger and now she was completely engrossed in it. She knew what she had to do next. She took out a cane and started hitting herself with it, this is the only way she knew to distract herself from the fantasy and get back to reality. He had often asked her about these injuries, she lied to him that her ex-husband used to physically abuse her.
It was a night of double celebration for him. She did not know it yet but a year ago on this very day he had seen her for the first time and had fallen in love with her instantly. She had come to his accounting firm because his firm did the accounts for her husband who was apparently murdered. He took it as a sign, the universe had given him a chance and he had to make the most of it, a year later they were together and his life had already changed forever. He decided he was going to ask her to marry him, no other day was better suited to do this, he had always been sure he was going to do it and now that he was successful there was no point in waiting. He stopped at the jewellery store and bought a beautiful diamond ring for her.
Something was wrong, no matter how many times she hit herself with the cane, the feeling refused to die. It had been more than an year since she had killed her husband, the desire was too strong, she felt her sane self being swallowed by it, she knew there was no point fighting it anymore. It was too late, she no longer had any control over herself. She went back to the kitchen picked up the knife and waited for him to return.
He could not wait to get back home, there was too much excitment, he drove the car as fast as he could. Ten minutes later he was there. He put the ring in his pocket, took the bottle of champagne he had bought and went toward the door.

18 comments:

Oxymoron said...

many of you wont like the ending.....but i thought it would be better you ended it your own way.....or maybe i might write the 3rd part....

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Saurabh Panshikar said...

On the contrary, I loved the ending... Quite cleanly left hanging...

Barbie Jones said...

I just know that she's not gonna kill him.I love this story,I can't wait to read the second part.I wonder what the engament ring looks like and what brand the champagne is.And if he had gotten her chocolate if it would be Lady Godiva.I like how he captured her teal eyes the color of the sea of the French Riviera.

Isha Ethera said...

Actually the ending is quite alright with me =]

The writer always knows how to make it end how it needs to perfectly . Lovely post today. mhmmm

I cant wait to see what else you have in store.

LITTLE ON THE EDGE said...

cant wait to see wat happens next!!!

nil said...

Did I mention what an awesome writer you are?

YOU need to keep writing!!!
And btw,I loved the ending.

Yemiledu said...

The 3rd POst I wait for..
I wish she kills him and then waits for her 4 th kill......
^-^
Disastrous Desires...:~P
Inb/w lovely pic!
I always wonder how you get perfectly suitable pictures to your stories????

Karthik said...

I liked the ending, man. It's better to leave it open ended, in my opinion. Should you give a conventional ending, the story might lose its impact. It's hard hitting the way it is now. Great job.

Ashley said...

I like the ending. You refrained from stating the obvious and gave us the opportunity to wonder...Did he get away?...Did he turn into that thing too?...Did he kill her?

Awesome story! I like. I like. :)

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

Why did you ever think people wouldn't like the ending? Sometimes it is nice to respect your readers' intelligence. You have brought out a big issue, this urge to kill (I don't know what you would call this abnormality) in the form a nice story. It has all the right ingredients. I liked the prequel and I like this one as well. Very nice piece indeed.

Rishi said...

and they both started singing abba songs??

http://theparanormalguy.blogspot.com/

gr8 write... thrilling... bit over at times but nothing lost... njoyed to the full

Sorcerer said...

hmm..nice..dont worry about the ending.it has its own style..

Chhaya said...

I loved the ending... but I m not comfortable with the treatment. I mean, its completely impossible to pass on current/recent bruises as something you sustained a year ago. no way.
I hope you dun mind me pointing that out. other than that, I liked the story :)

IdleMind said...

Suspension of disbelief? well, that's the way this should have been ended. But then, these are very difficult areas to explore. A lady who's fanatic enough to attempt killing every of her husbands is not so easy to describe.

Your attempt was definitely bold, but I know you can break stereotypes!

C G said...

I really loved the ending. Kinda gives a "To be continued" feel.

Great story! :)

Chhaya said...

Still waiting for you to pick up the writing :)

btw,
I am adding you to our little bloggers community. Kindly remember to leave a comment there whenever you post something new. Your link has been added and your latest post will be reflected there!!
sorry for the delay... :)

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Chhaya said...

when u gonna post the next one?